The prompt this week at We Write Poems was to accumulate twelve words, then write little snippets in response to those words. As usual I varied slightly: I took phrases from a Facebook page commemorating a young man who died last year. In each little stanza there’s a snippet from a post someone made to his page, with my own elaboration added.
facebook pages for the dead
melody says
she has lost faith
since clayton died
while the new owner
of his name
reassures her
he is in a better place
friends
post private jokes
remember the time
& his father leaves
updates
for him to read
it’s been a year
& we still
haven’t cleaned
your room
videos uploaded
in the night
here’s one of him dancing
dimly lit
& flickering
like altars
in dark corners
this is how I’ll remember him
prayers commemorate
important dates
I’m thankful for your
continued presence in my life
interpreting dreams
as more
he spoke to me
last night
as we are prone
to do
I woke up
and I still felt him
in my room
I really like what you did with this prompt…..nicely done and thanks for sharing your words
Thank you!
This so well covers the gamut of remembrance — in a compact and concise view. Very direct; connects so well! This seems a little different style than I have seen in your other poems, but you handle it like you have been doing this for years. Very well done!
Thanks – this was a half-done poem and the prompt helped me finish it. Prompts often help me complete unfinished poems, that’s why I keep EVERYTHING.
Absolutely keep everything. And in this case it produced a lovely memorial poem.
Thanks, Viv!
What a wonderful idea, Cynthia. I love this.
Pamela
Thank you, Pamela!
Liking it. It’s how the dead is inside us.
Thanks, Irene!
I keep running across the idea of remembrance. 😦 Was that part of the prompt I missed? Oh well, back yours … lovely, thoughtful, and perfect ending.
I don’t think so…guess we all just had the same on our minds this week. 🙂
I missed the very first line of this when I read it the first time (How’d I do that?) It changed the whole tone of the piece for me. Thanks for luring me back with your visit.
Cool – thanks for coming back by!
I absolutely love this. Wow.
Thank you Kelly!
“the new owner of his name.” This struck a nerve as I now have two dead friends still on Facebook and posting…
It’s strange, isn’t it? Yet I find it comforting to know after I die, my blogs and FB page can live on…
Dang. From such a simple prompt, you found a way to make it strike hard.
Well, I do try. 🙂